Bells
Is it me or…
Dad? Can you hear me?
…are bells ringing?
They told me you can hear me.
I can.
Can you blink or something?
I wish I could.
I… oh god… where to start?
Calm yourself, child.
I have to tell you something. Dad, I’m so sorry…
She didn’t make it, did she?
…but about mum. They did all they could.
I knew it, my darling. I knew it.
The funeral is today, dad. I wish you could be there. I’m scared.
Don’t be.
I don’t know if I can do it without you…
I’ll be with you, child. I can hear the bells ringing.
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Week 22 of Julia’s 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups, and there is seemingly no end in sight to the bleakness of my contributions. The prompt is
“Is it me or are bells ringing?”
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That just made me cry.
Oh this brought a tear. Excellent write
“Can you blink or something?”
“I wish I could.”
This touched me more than I can allow myself to say, Garry.
My god, that was so sad. It blew me away. The counterpoint works very well as the mood creeps up on you.
Brilliant, brilliant, almost scarily brilliant!
Beautifully crafted, excellent! I’m with the others, I so nearly cried . . .
Beyond words. Speechless. Really well done!
Love the interplay between the apparently one-sided conversation and the internal responses.
Brought a tear to my eye too. Really well-written piece.
OMG. That’s impressive…
Heartbreaking. Perfect. Enough said.
Goodness – so touching. My interpretation is ….I wrote it out that deleted as it is mine not everyone else’s. Very clever writing HUN!
And breathe! Wow!
Totally took my breath away.
Stirring stuff! Good work that man!
Beautiful writing as always. And so sad.
Wow, really like your interpretation of the task. It’s so touching. Fabulous stuff.
Touched a nerve this one, as my ex-husband is dying in hospital. Very emotional
Stunning.
Brilliant. Tugged at my heart strings from start to stop.
eerie but brilliant. So well written and kept me hanging on until the end. I hope they stayed strong.
When I read something this creative, I think to myself, “Time to hang up the ol’ keyboard.”
Lovely!
Amazing writing and such a sad topic
So well composed though
That was so beautiful – I kept imagining the scene of the car crash in ‘Signs’ the film with Mel Gibson
Mine (better late than never) is at http://wp.me/p1cFoK-NY